Sunday, March 16, 2008

technical application

so we got our papers back this week and i realized i have made the same mistakes on my parenting essay as i did on my health essay. Im glad we could get them back before the second paper is due. i thought i would think about a new enthymeme for my health paper for the review because it was a little weak right now its. 
WATCO eating disorders on young women's health
claim: eating disorders have a negative cause and effect on young women's health 
because eating disorders are not in order with the bodies natural digestive system. 
Mrs. Esplin said my B term is weak and not sure if the audience would disagree. now that i look at it i would have to agree. so im going to brainstorm some ideas for now. 
Watco: eating disorders on addiction  
i need a claim that my audience (middle school girls) would disagree with. 
Claim: eating disorders lead to a long lasting addiction. 
i would think this would be a better claim because maybe girls don't realize how addictive and how dangerous an addiction of any kind can be, especially an addiction this harmful to the body. it could be compared to a drug addiction. 

2 comments:

Belle said...

I agree that your audience would probably agree with your first claim. Your new claim sounds a lot better. Anything about leading to long term psychological problems or long term addiction would be something your audience would disagree with.

Philip said...

depending on your audience, this new claim will work i think. just make sure that b term is the one they really disagree with and the c term is the one they agree with so that a can be linked to b