free write

This week has been really busy with school, lacrosse and planning the wedding. i didn't really think i was feeling too stressed until today when i just wanted to have a nervous break down at practice for practically no reason. i guess i didn't realize how much i was doing and I'm still not done. i wont be done until this weekend, i just hope i don't get the flu. it seems to be going around and lasting a lot longer then usual. it like a five day fever flu. my fiance got it over the weekend and hasn't been able to go to school the past couple days cause he cant even get out of bed. i tried to do everything i could to help him; food, meds, ice cream etc... He started feeling better today and we were able to go to dinner with his brother and sister in-law tonight. i just hope i don't get it from spending so much time around him. 

technical application

i was going to start with rhetorical analysis this week but i don't have a topic for my paper yet so i cant research it yet. so i thought i would brianstorm for a few minuets. while i was reading other blogs i saw some good ideas but nothing that really stuck out to me. it might be because i dont feel that any topic on parenting can be persuasive and find research. maybe i could do something on authoritative parenting because during my presentation in class i found that the style of parenting is favored among researchers, but some students in class pointed out that it is good but unrealistic to be like that in every situation. so maybe WATCO autoritative parenting on the parent. or something that has to do with all of the parenting styles. oh, or something with single parent homes, WATCO single parent homes on child development. 

technical application

I have to write a new introduction for my paper so i thought i would brainstorm a little here first. I was thinking maybe a narrative because thats the best way to get my attention in a paper. 

#1- In China the women used to wrap their feet starting at a very young age so their feet wouldn't grow because small feet was seen a beautiful. In some african cultures it is seen as beautiful to pierce rings through their nose or pierce their body because the red bumps symbolize authority. In india they put hoops through their ears. In america young women are starving themselves because being thin in America is beautiful. Learning about different countries and what they do to symbolize beauty we tend to judge those people and think they are weird or crazy, but when in fact we do the same thing here in America. 

#2- I had a friend in high school that told me she was bulimic and wanted to get help. I asked why she did it, and she told me people liked her better when she was thinner and everyone wants to be her friend. I didn't understand because she already had a lot of friends and everyone already liked her. she was a great student that got good grades, was on the student counsel and was involved in other various school activities. In america beauty has been perceived as being thin, and young women are going to any length to achieve this. 

rhetorical analysis

This is an article i read for my first paper its called The phenomenon of compulsive overeating in a selected group of professional women. It tries to give an explanation as to why women would develop this condition. 

Audience: others in health profession

WATCO compulsive overeating on professional women.

Claim: compulsive overeating has an addictive effect on professional women. 

Reason: because compulsive overeating had recurrent themes that emerged from the data. 

IA: anything that has an addictive effect on professional women has recurrent themes that emerge. 

Sufficient: they did qualitative research instead of quantitative. this way researchers could learn what the participant wanted to say instead of having bias multiple choice questions the researchers just generalize. 

Typical: This is a typical approach to a research article and how they presented it. they showed their methods and findings. compulsive still does not have a basis as to why people develop it and so the researcher asked those with this addiction. 

Accurate: very credible. the author is a professor at a university in the united states. it comes from a well know credible journal. the professor doesn't seem bias, just states the findings. 

Relevant: the audience is health professional who will be able to use the information in their field of work and build off of it for further research. 

first tournament

Well, i just got back from my first tournament and it didn't go so well. we lost all four games, but I'm okay with that. we lost our entire starting line up and this is supposed to be a building year. we will be okay throughout the rest of the season because of how much we learned this tournament. Each game we played much better and each team we higher in rank. we put up a good fight considering how new our team is. it was a great time for all of the girls to get to know each other also. we drove 6 hours to vegas, slept, woke, and drove another 6 hours to santa Barbara. my family, fiance and his parents all came to watch and i really appreciated the support. i drove back to utah with my fiance, it was a lot better then with my team. we went to dinner with my parents and his parents and we talked about wedding plans for the reception. i feel so bad because i am so indecisive that it is taking so long to plan everything. I'm sure it will all work out though, i just need to make some choices and stick with them. 

technical analysis

I’m not sure what I want to write about so I thought I would brainstorm and one of the best ways is to write for 5 minutes straight. I know the topic is health and we can write on anything we want. I was thinking the easiest would be on eating disorders and the effects it has on teens. Maybe I could say what the reasons are for starting a eating disorder, the effects long term and short term. Im not sure I feel like that’s to simple but I really don’t want to do it on heath care in the united states, but it is such a big problem in our society today. Well maybe I could if I did it on something like comparing socialisms and free market health care. I would defiantly argue for free market because I thing social health care would reduce the quality of health care and I would rather have good and expensive then bad and cheap. I would also want to do eating disorders because I had a few good friends in high school who had bulimia and I would like to learn more about it. But I’m worried that I won’t have enough to say about it or there won’t be enough diversity in the research and it will all say they same thing. I could also do something that’s not eating disorders exactly. I would want my audience to be Jr. high girls or maybe elementary age because if you educate early there is less of a chance of them developing it. WATCO eating disorders on young women’s health, Claim: eating disorders have a negative effect on young women’s health. Reason: because eating disorders are not a natural part of the digestive system. IA: anything that is not a natural part of the digestive system will have a negative effect on young women’s health.

free write

lacrosse practice has been going really well the past couple of practices. The girls are really starting to click on the field. Last thursday at practice it started to get a little bit intense and i got hit in the face with a stick while going for a ground ball. Now I have this huge bruise on my chin that is black and purple. It hurt really bad when it happen and it is still a little numb. This weekend we are going to Santa Barbara, California for a tournament. We are playing the top ranked teams in the nation. I think we will do just fine because we have great team chemistry and have started to connect on the field. My whole family will be there to watch and Tanner's parents will be there also. So Im kind of nervous to have so many people there but tanners parents have never seen a game of lacrosse so they wont know really know what's going on anyway and my parents have been watching me play my whole life. we have one game friday afternoon then three on saturday spread though out the day. Ill drive there with my team and drive back with my fiance. Im excited to see how we will do, it will be fun. 

Rhetorical Analysis

I went to 24 hour fitness at the beginning of this semester to get a gym pass.
Audience: Me, 20 years old, BYU student who plays Lacrosse and needs to get in shape before the season starts. I’m trying to decide between 24 hr and Gold’s gym. I need to be able to freeze or cancel my account when lacrosse season starts because I will be working out with my team and don’t want to pay every month for a gym I am not using.
Argument: They want me to get a member ship with them. WATCO me getting membership at 24hr on working with my schedule.
Claim: If I get a membership at 24 hr they will work with my schedule.
Reason: Because if I get a membership at 24hr they will let me freeze or cancel my account at any time without charge.
IA: Any gym that lets me freeze or cancel my account at any time without charge will work with my schedule.
Ethos: The sales women was wearing a 24hr shirt with a collar. She had a flip book with her whole presentation on it. She talked really fast and could give me prices and answer questions I had.
Pathos: she tried to work with my schedule and acted like she really cared if 24 was the best for me. She threw in how it was more convenient for me. She acted like she was making this huge sacrifice if she gave me this discount for signing with them that night. Then one of her friends came by and gave her a flyer on if I signed up today I get ten dollars off ever month, and she acted all excited and I’m not going to lie it made me all excited too.
Logos: she made it sound like 24 hour was the only gym that could work with my schedule and satisfaction.
Effective: yes, I signed up without even looking at Gold’s Gym.